Dang, I was fine right up until I wasn't. This almost brought me to tears, man. You managed to capture action, that need for adventure, the desperation for a new life and the deep sadness of a mistake that will sit with Jake, and the boy's family, forever. You did something special here, and had me thinking about the ramifications of the characters actions on people beyond the story, the emotions of characters you hadn't even wrote about. That's amazing worldbuilding, especially in such a short piece, and that is real talent.
You cooked with this one, pun intended. Jake’s being primed for danger by his father’s harsh nature killed the boy, a mistake born of instinct. A weighty read indeed!
Great descriptions color a moment of intensity that pull (and pull well) the reader in. Perfect amount of context and word count for an enticing, highly readable short. Excellent work!
Beautiful!
thank you so much, ian! much love bro !
Dang, I was fine right up until I wasn't. This almost brought me to tears, man. You managed to capture action, that need for adventure, the desperation for a new life and the deep sadness of a mistake that will sit with Jake, and the boy's family, forever. You did something special here, and had me thinking about the ramifications of the characters actions on people beyond the story, the emotions of characters you hadn't even wrote about. That's amazing worldbuilding, especially in such a short piece, and that is real talent.
thank you so much for the kind words, kerr. i always appreciate hearing your thoughts. much love, my friend.
Such a textural, captivating read!
thank you so much!!
You cooked with this one, pun intended. Jake’s being primed for danger by his father’s harsh nature killed the boy, a mistake born of instinct. A weighty read indeed!
ellis! thank you for reading and sharing your thoughts! much love!
Slade! You broke bad? Hah, I really liked the middle part. I was tense.
Thank you for sharing and I hope you are doing great!
thank you for reading and interacting martin! you are awesome!! i hope life is treating you well!
5 star read, thank you Mr Slade!
my goat. thank you aidan!
Great descriptions color a moment of intensity that pull (and pull well) the reader in. Perfect amount of context and word count for an enticing, highly readable short. Excellent work!
thank you so much, Steven ! cheers my friend!