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Ian Cattanach's avatar

Beautiful!

Kerr Martin's avatar

Dang, I was fine right up until I wasn't. This almost brought me to tears, man. You managed to capture action, that need for adventure, the desperation for a new life and the deep sadness of a mistake that will sit with Jake, and the boy's family, forever. You did something special here, and had me thinking about the ramifications of the characters actions on people beyond the story, the emotions of characters you hadn't even wrote about. That's amazing worldbuilding, especially in such a short piece, and that is real talent.

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